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1.
I want to swallow the noises you make when
you sleep and feed them back
to you like a bird. I want to lick
your heart into shape. I am in love with so many
things, she says, and I can't
have any of them. I just
can't.

this is our home and it's burning all around us.


2.
sometimes I feel a little mad. sometimes I feel
like looking out the right window makes anywhere
feel like home. sometimes I feel like
the only one I ever turned to is the one
who's holding the match and it almost--
no, it breaks my heart.
it really, really does.


3.
at night I close my eyes and remember what it feels like
to be in love. mostly
I remember how often it made me cry, and how
it's not supposed to be like that. it's not supposed to be like that.

no, it's not.


4.
this was our home and it's burning all around us.
Full Title: I don't have the breath left for this.

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this is our home and it's burning all around us.

over and over,
over and over,
over and over.
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:icongothicnimrod:
gothicnimrod Featured By Owner May 13, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful...
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 9, 2009
i was in love after i finished the first part.
love, love, love.
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:iconhorsewild111:
Horsewild111 Featured By Owner May 9, 2009
Mmmmm nicely written!
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AngelicLight Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2008
that was amazing :)
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KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2008
at night I close my eyes and remember what it feels like
to be in love. mostly
I remember how often it made me cry, and how
it's not supposed to be like that.


that's why I choose insomnia :) Seriously though, excellent writing and I hope it gets better for you soon.
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oldest-boy Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2008
priceless.
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AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
I feel like
the only one I ever turned to is the one
who's holding the match and it almost--
no, it breaks my heart.
it really, really does.


3.
at night I close my eyes and remember what it feels like
to be in love. mostly
I remember how often it made me cry, and how
it's not supposed to be like that. it's not supposed to be like that.


These lines impact me. Beautiful. Really.
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sweet-lyrical Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008   Writer
I think the "it's no supposed to be like that. it's not supposed to be like that." were almost the hardest lines to write in the poem.
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AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
Somehow, that very much shows... Guess that's why my mind stopped there and ticked over, before reading the rest of the piece. It's the hardest part to read.
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Pisciculus Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008  Student Writer
I felt like my head was cracked open and you stole the feelings right out of it. I love it. I like the third part, but I also like the very end.
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sweet-lyrical Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008   Writer
thank you :heart: I like the end, too. I just had to get that last line in there somehow, and I kept rearranging things and words and line breaks until it worked.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008  Student Writer
the third stanza is particularly strong and the soulful plaintive tone rings very very true.. :)
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sweet-lyrical Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008   Writer
thank you :heart:
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Wiemberlien Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008   Writer
Oh, breathtaking.
I love the 3rd part, because everyone knows it's not supposed to feel that way, but it always feels that way. It hurts. You are a great poet.
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sweet-lyrical Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008   Writer
I'd like to think it isn't *always* going to feel that way. I'd like to hope it isn't. god, I'd like to hope.
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naomielizabeth Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
It won't. It doesn't. Not always :) (please remove any patronising tone you may have heard in that... I just wanted to let you know).

'sometimes I feel
like looking out the right window makes anywhere
feel like home.'
- Oh, that bit got me. xxx
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sweet-lyrical Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008   Writer
I just moved, and I was almost nervous about looking out my new bedroom window for the first time... because I've never had a view that calmed me as much as my very first bedroom back when I still lived at home, and everything since then has kind of disappointed me.

And then I looked, and it was perfect. It was eerily similar to my first bedroom's view, in all sorts of crazy ways, and it just made everything okay.

And thank you. It wasn't patronising; it was comforting. Every now and then, I need someone to tell me that it isn't always going to be like this.
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Nycterisdream Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008
ahhh :D you did, and its good and yay :D I wasn't sure what was missing and you changed it perfectly.
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sweet-lyrical Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008   Writer
yeah, I fiddled with it quite a few times last night, taking out and putting in the same few words over and over until it looked like it sounded in my head.
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Nycterisdream Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008
I guess thats the noticeable difference - it looks and feels more Steph-esque... so yeh, I'd guess more how your head works ;)

(as wrong as it feels to presume how your thoughts look :D )
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